Today in class we learnt to read like a writer. We learnt to point out ideas, organization, voice, word choice, sentence fluency and convention. They all play a very big role when you writing and we learnt to find these in a piece of writing.
It had a normal setting but with a scary, old train and a boy tiring to find out if its haunted.
The opening line hocked me in straight away and made we think of questions like why don’t they get rid of the train? is they train haunted?
The author’s voice made it interesting that he made you feel calm and made you want to feel like you need to read on.
The author used the perfect would to set the scene. He used the word in a interesting why.
The author made the sentence small so you didn’t have to ran out of breath because it was a came seance and not so intense.
The author used the right grammar and spelling through out the story.And used the right words for the right seance.
If the scene was intense , I would make the sentence longer to make the reader breathless so they could feel the intensity.I would also have ellipsis, they are when a charter is thinking on unsure about something. The author had a hocking start .When you are starting a story, you need to have a hocking start to involved the reader and make the reader want more